CONCEPT MAP
by Iram Zoha
Submission date: 02-May-2020 03:24PM (UTC+1000)
Submission ID: 1313894680
File name: 2804NRS_3201_86528140_1098941257_CONCEPT_MAP.docx (94.88K)
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Hypertension
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FINAL GRADE
27/100
CONCEPT MAP
GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
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Text Comment. Hypertension
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age greater than 65
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you haven’t linked HTN correctly , consider hormone driven changes here and link to male
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Isnt this the same as the aetiology?
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these are separate risks
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nausea would be more related to raised ICP
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how does HTN link to decreased HR ,
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you have already state HTN
you have already state HTN
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.ECG is a general diagnostic tool when abnormal vital signs are presented so it is likely this is a
nursing intervention for this case scenario as it would rule out any diagnosis associated with
electrical irregularities of the heart however it does not diagnose hypertension.
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which pupil? more related to compression on the occulomotor nerve
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where are you draining CSF from ?
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due to why ?
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neck stiffness is more linked to menigoccal disease
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This wasnt in the case scenario
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confusion due to lack of oxygen and glucose
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What causes this? You need some links
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use correct terminology , dyarthria
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how is x-ray linked to swallowing ,
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what is an ICH score ?
QM
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there are more than 2 types of strokes ,
transient ischaemic attact (TIA) ischaemic stroke, haemorragic stroke and cryptogenic stroke
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explain what one you are referring to here clealry
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no , it did not decrease the prognosis , he had a haemorrhagic stroke
inappropriate
inappropriate academic resource, you need to use peer reviewed literature ,
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you need to explain why he developed these symptoms
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why did he develop these ? explain the pathophysiology here
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this does not make sense and there is no link to the concept map
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what action ?
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why would he require oxygen ?
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what airway blockage , it stated in the case study he had difficulty swallowing , not that he had a
compromised airway , remember the trachea and oesophagus are different tubes, one is for food the
other for air
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aspiration means that a substance other than air has entered the airways , a patient would be in
danger if they aspirated, and a GCS would not identify aspiration
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GCS assess only level of conscious not for breathing
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obtaining IV would not do this
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what is this ?
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why ? identify increased bleeding
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what surgery is required and why ?
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why do you need to bring the BP down
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here is nothing in the case study that suggests he is diabetic
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I see you have tried hard here with concept par and explanation , however in your written section you
have not identified or discussed the risk factors and how they contribute to the pt’s diagnosis , you
have not addressed the pathophysiology or explained them , you have give some treatments but not
linked them to the correct pathophysiology and you have given the pt a diagnosis of diabetes and
that was not in the case study.
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centre
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is this the journal name ?
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use a hanging indent, refer to ref and writing guide
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4.5
PRESENTATION (5 MARKS)
CONCEPT MAP (45 MARKS)
GRADING FORM: 2804NRS MC 2020
IRAM
ZOHA
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– Correct spelling/grammar Mostly used throughout
assignment. 2.5/3 – Concept map is colour coded
with distinct colours and a respective key.1 /1 –
Correct file submitted (PowerPoint or Microsoft word
document). 1/1
2/3, No Risk factors listed 2/3 -No Risk factors linked
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WRITTEN EXPLANATION (40 MARKS)
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REFERENCES (10 MARKS)
correctly 0 /6 – illogical pathophysiology of disease
listed 1/3 – 3/5, Clinical manifestations listed 3/5 One
Clinical manifestations linked correctly 2/10 Some
correct diagnostics listed 1.5/3 one diagnostics linked
correctly 1/6 -one correct treatments listed 2/3 Some
treatments linked correctly 2/6
No Risk factors explain correctly 0/9 no explanation
of how aetiology contributes to the patient’s
diagnosis 0/4 No clinical manifestations explained
correctly 0 /15 one diagnostics explained for their
clinical appropriateness 1/6 one treatments explained
for their clinical appropriateness 1/6
Explanation includes reputable, current and
appropriate references 1/3 – Statements and claims
in written explanation are Mostly justified by
references 3/4 – APA Style 7th Edition Inconsistently
followed for both in-text and in reference list 1/2 Intext citations are listed in the reference list 1/1
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